I like it as is, Doug, Andrew, with the definite article cropping up in each line. Somehow more personal, kinship implied.
Bill
> On 7 Nov 2013, at 12:10 pm, Andrew Burke <[log in to unmask]> wrote:
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> Nice instagram shot. How about dropping the 'the' at the beginning? Andrew
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>> On 7 November 2013 03:33, Douglas Barbour <[log in to unmask]> wrote:
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>> the snow has once more
>> carved the trees
>> into the darkening sky
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>>
>> Douglas Barbour
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>> http://www.ualberta.ca/~dbarbour/
>> http://eclecticruckus.wordpress.com/
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>> Latest books:
>> Continuations & Continuations 2 (with Sheila E Murphy)
>> http://www.uap.ualberta.ca/UAP.asp?LID=41&bookID=962
>> Recording Dates
>> (Rubicon Press)
>>
>> Art is always the replacing of indifference by attention.
>>
>> Guy Davenport
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> Andrew
> http://hispirits.blogspot.com/
> 'Undercover of Lightness'
> http://walleahpress.com.au/recent-publications.html
> 'Shikibu Shuffle'
> http://abovegroundpress.blogspot.com.au/2012/03/new-from-aboveground-press-shikibu.html
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