Held me start to finish. Why cut it into lines? It would read well as a
prose poem.
Andrew
On 6 February 2013 17:48, Lawrence Upton <[log in to unmask]> wrote:
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> Thanks, Sheila. I appreciate that
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> L
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> Sent:Tue, 5 Feb 2013 23:34:29 -0700
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> Beautiful piece
>
> On Tue, Feb 5, 2013 at 10:44 PM, Lawrence Upton
> wrote:
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> > Crossing the low dune to the beach, the dog
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> > turned west. That seemed deliberate. I gave
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> > her some slack; and was pulled, following, to see
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> > many gulls in gaggle at the head, a spit,
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> > and the gulls were spitting! so, possibilities
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> > of beached fish. As we neared, they all skittered
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> > and rose; the dog leapt into a big rush --
> >
> > a fair-sized southern whiting pecked half clean
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> > on gull-foot-trampled sand, and she galloping off --
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> > And seemed reluctant to return. At last
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> > came back to see what I was pointing to.
> >
> > She sniffed but was unsure. Too much spattering
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> > of grit? It never bothered her before --
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> > I bent down, inhaling; and lifted it;
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> > half fish, its bottom side still unblemished,
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> > smelling fresh to me; tossed it into waves,
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> > the dog after it, jumping in, sniffing;
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> > and, after some minutes, she thrust her head
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> > underwater, and pulled it out, dropped it
> >
> > at the sea edge and danced away and back and
> >
> > around but never touched the corpse again.
> >
> > Richard Kessling / Lawrence Upton
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Andrew
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