Yes, I went with it and liked it, pausing over some images to let them
settle, but I just absolutely loved the end:
hovery
and clearest
the black-backed gull
Wow, that's the finest point, sd he, pointing his finger.
Andrew
On 22 February 2013 13:00, Jill Jones <[log in to unmask]> wrote:
> is there an opposite of cause? i wonder myself. if not cause, then things
> happen beside or opposite
>
> matanaka was opposite to karitane - or it was 'over there' from the where
> of my original observation
>
> the sea between often had a mist just above it (then there was the all-day
> sea fog, but that's a different poem)
>
> those gulls were always sure, and emerging
>
> thanks for the questions,
> J
>
>
> On 22/02/2013, at 12:08 PM, Bill Wootton wrote:
>
> > If the opposite of cause is uncause or destroy or deny, I'm still
> getting my head around this sea, Jill, so descibed. Perhaps waves shiver up
> their offerings? No undertow? I'm hearing and seeing slow movements and
> like others, I like 'hovery' and that gull emerging so surely.
> >
> > Bill
> >
> > On 22/02/2013, at 12:39 AM, Jill Jones <[log in to unmask]> wrote:
> >
> >> Matanaka from Karitane
> >>
> >>
> >>
> >> the sea
> >>
> >> shivers
> >>
> >> cause but not the opposite
> >>
> >>
> >>
> >> slope clearer
> >>
> >> late when
> >>
> >> there is no evening
> >>
> >>
> >>
> >> halfway down
> >>
> >> there is a bush
> >>
> >>
> >>
> >> faint dark streak of a cloud
> >>
> >> near the base faint
> >>
> >> but distinct path mark
> >>
> >>
> >>
> >> windy in rose
> >>
> >> tussock morning glory
> >>
> >> palm ryegrass
> >>
> >>
> >>
> >> the pattern
> >>
> >> whitecaps
> >>
> >> change
> >>
> >>
> >>
> >> current sheer
> >>
> >> the cliff
> >>
> >> thrown
> >>
> >>
> >>
> >> sound is more
> >>
> >> sound death
> >>
> >> bird call
> >>
> >>
> >>
> >> identify or simply hear
> >>
> >> as you see bright haze
> >>
> >> without outline
> >>
> >>
> >>
> >> hovery
> >>
> >> and clearest
> >>
> >> the black-backed gull
> >>
> >>
> >>
>
--
Andrew
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