Two questions precede this snap, Petcers:
1. Can I get away with the rhymes which end lines 11 & 14? (Is it done to rhyme 'un' words anyway? Or is trammel/travel just too stupid for words?)
2. In line 12, is that where the question mark should appear, or somewhere else, or not at all?
Correspondence will be entered into.
Cheers,
Bill
Petrarchan argument sonnet
Why is it that everything I want to do
is a commitment? It's freedom you seek,
you say: blank spaces in the coming weeks.
It's not like I'm proposing a tattoo;
surely we can accept a barbecue.
It's not far to go up to Pheasant Creek.
Distance? It may as well be Mozambique.
Parties, movies, openings, toodle-oo!
Retirement from work should open doors
Things once knocked back can now be accepted
Why want openendedness untrammelled?
Wither spontaneity? always your
riposte, which leaves me feeling all bereft.
Check the calendar for roads untravelled.
Bill Wootton
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