A double tick for Achievement and a Gold Lion for Endeavour
Andrew
On 5 December 2012 08:30, Roger Collett <[log in to unmask]> wrote:
> Bill,
>
> Just change Wither to Whither and all will be OK.
>
> Roger Collett
> Arrowhead Press
> http://www.arrowheadpress.co.**uk/ <http://www.arrowheadpress.co.uk/>
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> ----- Original Message ----- From: "Bill Wootton" <
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> Sent: Tuesday, December 04, 2012 8:16 PM
> Subject: Petrarchan argument sonnet snap
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>
> Two questions precede this snap, Petcers:
>
> 1. Can I get away with the rhymes which end lines 11 & 14? (Is it done to
> rhyme 'un' words anyway? Or is trammel/travel just too stupid for words?)
>
> 2. In line 12, is that where the question mark should appear, or somewhere
> else, or not at all?
>
> Correspondence will be entered into.
>
> Cheers,
> Bill
>
> Petrarchan argument sonnet
>
> Why is it that everything I want to do
> is a commitment? It's freedom you seek,
> you say: blank spaces in the coming weeks.
> It's not like I'm proposing a tattoo;
> surely we can accept a barbecue.
> It's not far to go up to Pheasant Creek.
> Distance? It may as well be Mozambique.
> Parties, movies, openings, toodle-oo!
> Retirement from work should open doors
> Things once knocked back can now be accepted
> Why want openendedness untrammelled?
> Wither spontaneity? always your
> riposte, which leaves me feeling all bereft.
> Check the calendar for roads untravelled.
>
> Bill Wootton
>
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Andrew
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