Perhaps so, Doug, the shift. Comes from jotting a few lines while looking at said item and returning each day to add a bit more. I did consciously try to alter the mood in the second stanza to be a 'wider' sort of thing but I can see it is a bit forced still.
Cheers,
Bill
On 29/11/2012, at 3:51 AM, Douglas Barbour <[log in to unmask]> wrote:
> Yes, I m iss george, too, Bill
>
> also feel a shift of tone & manner from the first few lines to the rest; not sure what happened there, but it seems to be a move from an older formality to a more recent one...?
>
> Doug
> On 2012-11-27, at 2:12 PM, Bill Wootton <[log in to unmask]> wrote:
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>> Ode to a Beatles Mug
>>
>> O tatty sixties busted cup, you'll do,
>> even if hot chocolate you hold no more.
>> Circumscribed by boys with slim ties and suits,
>> your faded plastic still showcases the Fab Four.
>> A florin-sized slit chunk of your wide white
>> lip rim is gone, above gooby Ringo,
>> whose jewel-heavy hands are together laid.
>> Vain, unspectacled Lennon stares below.
>> Paul's polite grey crewneck buries his tie.
>> You still bear your understamp, in Melbourne made.
>>
>> Once a showbag trinket, a throwaway,
>> now collectable, forty eight years on.
>> Each year passing, looks more like Yesterday.
>> We loved The Beatles, especially John,
>> before he Imagined so naively.
>> In a pre-decimal Australia,
>> other mega-pop stars with uncoiffed hair
>> appeared on all sorts of paraphernalia.
>> But it's these mop tops we embraced so keenly
>> and this mug has survived its wear and tear.
>>
>> Bill Wootton
>> 28 November 12
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