yeah, thanks, Bill… that 'be' needs to be deleted…careless of me. now fixed below..
Travelling, and therefore - ? feeling dislocated? worse?
take care..
Max
On 12/09/2012, at 4:24 PM, Bill Wootton wrote:
> Excellent, Max. in stanza 7, should 'will' be added to the third line, or perhaps 'be' be withdrawn from the
> fourth?
>
> This poem speaks to a traveller.
>
> Bill
>
> On 12/09/2012, at 2:15 AM, Max Richards <[log in to unmask]> wrote:
>
> The Afterlife
>
> [from a phrase by John Burnside]
>
> 'The afterlife has been
> discontinued'.
> Management wishes
> to apologize.
>
> Management,
> be it known,
> has also been
> discontinued.
>
> On whose say-so?
> Word has got around.
>
> Virtual connection
> will be restored
> as soon as
> conditions permit.
>
> As if such a promise
> can be entertained.
>
> Apocalypse?
> it's been costed -
> permanent deferral
> seems advisable.
>
> Redemption coupons -
> withdrawn -
> no longer
> redeemable.
>
> You are not
> connected.
> Incorrect
> password.
>
> On whose say-so?
> The system has spoken.
>
>
>
> On Wed, Sep 12th, 2012 at 10:15 AM, Max Richards <[log in to unmask]> wrote:
>
>> The Afterlife
>>
>> [from a phrase by John Burnside]
>>
>> 'The afterlife has been
>> discontinued'.
>> Management wishes
>> to apologize.
>>
>> Management,
>> be it known,
>> has also been
>> discontinued.
>>
>> On whose say-so?
>> Word has got around.
>>
>> Virtual connection
>> will be restored
>> as soon as
>> conditions permit.
>>
>> As if such a promise
>> can be entertained.
>>
>> Apocalypse?
>> it's been costed -
>> permanent deferral
>> seems advisable.
>>
>> Redemption coupons -
>> withdrawn -
>> no longer
>> be redeemable.
>>
>> You are not
>> connected.
>> Incorrect
>> password.
>>
>> On whose say-so?
>> The system has spoken.
>>
>>
>>
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