I agree too. Jill
I have been thinking about this for some time
I went and chatted up a photocopier and came back
and I am still of that opinion
what they said
penultimate ultimate
my pills don't have opiates
-- we have a thing here now where the pharmacist asks you now and then if
you know what you're taking.. my doctor's really good I think but there
are some as are... well, thinking of grass perhaps
or, under the stealthy privatisation, taking tally
and he asked me a couple of days ago if such and such a pill was having
any side effects
no I said
no drowsiness?
no
difficulty concentrating?
no
he seemed disappointed
yes, before I get muddled or fall asleep, I think the last line could be
given a golden handshake
enough already
L
On Wed, June 6, 2012 16:51, Douglas Barbour wrote:
> I like it Jill, but came to it with Chris's comment in mind, & see how
> that penultimate line could sound good as the ultimate one (sound that, I
> mean).
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> The final line fits too, so...
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> (alas, we had such clouds as made even trying to watch useless...)
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> Doug
> On 2012-06-06, at 1:35 AM, Jill Jones wrote:
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>> clouds don’t matter though they are matter
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>> and who knows if there’s music out there
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>> somewhere technology shows
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>> its furry edge and a spectrum
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>> a dark spot moving upon heat out there
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>> somewhere it flashes on my eye I
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>> stare round clouds to a screen it
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>> could be almost perfect somewhere
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>> Jill Jones www.jilljones.com.au
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