as the goldfish said to the mermaid
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On Wed, June 20, 2012 16:38, Patrick McManus wrote:
> Quote or not four waves in three short lines seems a bit much a tad dense
> methinks?? Cheers P waving waves wavely waves :-)
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> -----Original Message-----
> From: Poetryetc: poetry and poetics [mailto:[log in to unmask]] On
> Behalf Of Andrew Burke
> Sent: 20 June 2012 14:48
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> Subject: Re: snap: wet noodles
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> No, Patrick it is a quote - a pun-ish-meant.
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> Lawrence, y're right: dampens. Thanks.
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> Just a doodle, but I might edit it into what I'm trying to compose for a
> mag - under poetic pressure.
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> G'night all -
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> Andrew
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> On 20 June 2012 19:54, Patrick McManus
> <[log in to unmask]>wrote:
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>> Last verse line perhaps could lose a waves?????
>> Cheers P
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>> -----Original Message-----
>> From: Poetryetc: poetry and poetics [mailto:[log in to unmask]]
>> On Behalf Of Andrew Burke
>> Sent: 20 June 2012 11:08
>> To: [log in to unmask]
>> Subject: snap: wet noodles
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>> rain crescendo dogs crest fallen day gets damp
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>> a tap drips pianissimo
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>> cross currents of changing seasons unsettle
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>> house holds tight to her foundations
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>> strapped to the deck a German yacht rides the waves
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>> a gift to a man in middle age
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>> sound waves light waves 'waves wave without greeting'*
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>> - -
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>> * jill jones poem
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>> Andrew
>> http://hispirits.blogspot.com/
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> --
> Andrew
> http://hispirits.blogspot.com/
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Lawrence Upton
Visiting Fellow, Music Dept,
Goldsmiths, University of London
New Cross, London SE14 6NW
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