yep, sage advice. Andrew
On 25 May 2012 12:55, Kenneth Wolman <[log in to unmask]> wrote:
> As my former President said, It depends on what Is Is. Something like
> that. But yes, there is a point here and removing "is" doesn't do anything
> negative. Is so. I looked back at some of my old stuff, I mean
> pre-Poetryetc, and it's much more ornate and less "prosaic." I like the
> spare-sounding me. Just get to the damn point, Ken…. Long ago someone gave
> me one bit of writing advice: "Murder your darlings." Maybe I'm starting to
> figure that out--lose the excess words.
>
> K
>
> On May 24, 2012, at 11:17 PM, Andrew Burke wrote:
>
> > Doug was spot on with the 'is's - but we all have different accents,
> don't
> > we, so often how I'd say it is vastly different to how others hear it. I
> > have an Irish friend who writes fairly prosaic lines at times but when
> you
> > hear him read them, they sing like angels (he's an Irish devil, of
> course).
> >
> > But it's a 'moving' poem in more ones than one.
> >
> > Andrew
> >
> > On 24 May 2012 22:46, Douglas Barbour <[log in to unmask]> wrote:
> >
> >> Well, that's supposed to be the way to snap, ken, so good on ya. If I
> did
> >> make any change now, it would be to remove the 'is's in the first 2
> lines...
> >>
> >> 'haunted/back' works especially well....
> >>
> >> Doug
> >> On 2012-05-23, at 6:56 PM, Kenneth Wolman wrote:
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> >>> Everything tends toward farewell.
> >>> The apartment is clean at last.
> >>> The cat is fed and stoned on catnip.
> >>> The lease will be signed on Friday.
> >>> And I will be gone from here
> >>> where nothing but memories haunted
> >>> back to the old place to build
> >>> new hauntings.
> >>>
> >>> KTW
> >>>
> >>
> >> Douglas Barbour
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> >> http://www.ualberta.ca/~dbarbour/
> >> http://eclecticruckus.wordpress.com/
> >>
> >> Latest books:
> >> Continuations & Continuations 2 (with Sheila E Murphy)
> >> http://www.uap.ualberta.ca/UAP.asp?LID=41&bookID=962
> >> Wednesdays'
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> >>
> http://abovegroundpress.blogspot.com/2008/03/new-from-aboveground-press_10.html
> >>
> >>
> >> Why can’t words mean what they say?
> >>
> >> Robert Kroetsch
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> > --
> > Andrew
> > http://hispirits.blogspot.com/
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