It's interesting, Lawrence, that it demonstrates,to me, how to utilize that 'is' for character (d)effect. I could see altering, say the first line of that 3rd stanza to 'No doubt he is free of men' & on, but this way of stretching it out also argues an oddly passive (aggressive) stance both for his religion & against others (at least as I read it).
I would, in my own work (& therefore in my eitorial reading) go against the 'is' as such, but, obviously, one can use iot for certain specific purposes...
As here.
Doug
On 2012-05-24, at 11:11 AM, Lawrence Upton wrote:
> thank you, sheila
>
> I am not sure about the third stanza myself
>
> it's more a memo for future writing perhaps
>
> but i wasn't sure
>
> so...
>
> thus, thanks!
>
> L
>
> On Thu, May 24, 2012 18:47, Sheila Murphy wrote:
>> I hear this delicious piece quite vividly, and I appreciate it!
>> First two stanzas, especially, are great.
>> On Thu, May 24, 2012 at 9:44 AM, Lawrence Upton <[log in to unmask]>
>> wrote:
>>
>>
>>> Elidius laughs, ecstatic, flame, joy fuelled
>>> who has known the inverse of bright being, wandering it in intimate
>>> exploration, patient with the blockage. Like a trapped fly; and as
>>> ceaseless, always, having escaped.
>>>
>>> He burns on the heights of the inner head.
>>> In a cavernous undercroft beneath him,
>>> he mourns; and is cursed; and is failing, falling in hate reinforcing
>>> itself, as does a fire when ash accumulates.
>>>
>>> There is no doubt that he is free of men;
>>> but he is doubtless cut off the same, the whole race, herding, such as is
>>> here, keeping him back by simple derision.
>>>
>>> -----
>>> Lawrence Upton
>>> Visiting Fellow, Music Dept,
>>> Goldsmiths, University of London
>>> New Cross, London SE14 6NW
>>> ----
>>>
>>>
>>
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> Lawrence Upton
> Visiting Fellow, Music Dept,
> Goldsmiths, University of London
> New Cross, London SE14 6NW
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