Lawrenzo - I liked it all but felt, after feeling the slo-mo effect of the
majority of the poem, that 'snatching' was a bit aggressive for her
movement there ... Just a thought.
Androo
On 12 April 2012 02:01, Lawrence Upton <[log in to unmask]> wrote:
> Thanks, Doug
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> On Wed, April 11, 2012 19:07, Douglas Barbour wrote:
> > Nicely seen & juedged, especially the 'stumble' on 'that // far'...
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> > Doug
> > On 2012-04-11, at 9:28 AM, Lawrence Upton wrote:
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> >> snapshot
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> >> a child on a wall untouched a touch shaky on narrowness
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> >> snatching at air between herself and a bush
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> >> as if to pull them – herself and the bush – closer to each other
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> >> unable to go that
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> >> far without stumbling from the edginess
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> >> urging herself “Reach! Reach!” turning towards people
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> >> and their beyond world commands “Go away! All go!”
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> > How, but thru a monstrous 'specialism', the so-called authority of
> > erstwhile 'professionals', have we come to leave_breath_ out of images
> > and _images_ out of breath, anyhow?
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