I see, I see
I believed you when you said you liked them; but I misunderstood that bit.
Now there's an idea, to be able to write lines about waddling gulls that
themselves waddle -- and in a small space too rather than building up an
effect -- I can imagine that, a build up, as being possible
That is a thought...
Anyway, I withdraw the charge of waddleism
L
On Sat, November 19, 2011 17:53, Douglas Barbour wrote:
> Lawrence
>
>
> I like those lines, but was just saying that _they_ didnt waddle, even as
> they caught it...
>
> Doug
> On 2011-11-19, at 4:15 AM, Lawrence Upton wrote:
>
>
>> I don't see what's wrong with waddling, you waddleist
>>
>>
>> No other word fits
>>
>>
>> It's hardly a cliche word
>>
>>
>> L
>>
>>
>>
>> On Thu, November 17, 2011 20:08, Douglas Barbour wrote:
>>
>>> Agree with Sheila, & Stephen. And especially like the mirroring, &
>>> then those final four lines, their assurance but no waddling....
>>>
>>> Doug
>>> On 2011-11-17, at 10:42 AM, Lawrence Upton wrote:
>>>
>>>
>>>
>>>> Thank you so much, Sheila
>>>>
>>>>
>>>>
>>>> L
>>>>
>>>>
>>>>
>>>> On Wed, November 16, 2011 18:40, Sheila Murphy wrote:
>>>>
>>>>
>>>>> This is sterling, Lawrence. Extremely compelling on multiple
>>>>> levels, not the least of which is the way that you draw forth one
>>>>> sense by way of another. Visual and tactile join beautifully, for
>>>>> example. I feel the movement take pinpoint and waved effort. Very
>>>>> fine, indeed.
>>>>>
>>>>> Sheila
>>>>>
>>>>>
>>>>>
>>>>>
>>>>> On Wed, Nov 16, 2011 at 6:35 AM, Lawrence Upton
>>>>> <[log in to unmask]>
>>>>> wrote:
>>>>>
>>>>>
>>>>>
>>>>>
>>>>>> White islands glide over battered granite hills;
>>>>>> and, near sky, top floors, empty, unfinished, without
>>>>>> balustrades, architecturally complex. Show-through and
>>>>>> mirrorings of light splashed on to the soft blue of the
>>>>>> atmosphere, setting off dark blues of harbour and bay.
>>>>>>
>>>>>> Water’s high. It’s after five, boats returning,
>>>>>> all predominantly white; and white seagulls, apparently
>>>>>> wandering, butterflies. Black back on the roof of Salubrious
>>>>>> House… the pine
>>>>>> glossy in our garden. Two herring gulls floating on the water of
>>>>>> the bay. Three gulls now. A single boat, two people in it,
>>>>>> south-east of Smeaton’s lighthouse, going north,
>>>>>> only now becoming visible, but fully seen in the room’s mirror.
>>>>>> A
>>>>>> single boat goes south, perhaps to round the pier into harbour,
>>>>>> in both window and glass; in the mirror; and my memory. More
>>>>>> gulls butterflying. Wind makes the palm shudder. Boats drift at
>>>>>> their tethers. Tourists walk past in the picture’s lower half –
>>>>>> I know they’re there -- looking with
>>>>>> envious anger at the houses. A half a million pounds’. More than
>>>>>> the loss of all one’s limbs and eyes. More than a death. A boat
>>>>>> is gleaned into the mirror’s picture, oared, northerly towards a
>>>>>> marker buoy; a small boat, but this one’s under power, overhauls
>>>>>> it -- it seems some pleasantries exchange – and then departs
>>>>>> into the bay’s core and the further ocean, though, at that size,
>>>>>> it’ll stay close by land. A larger boat, masted, wooden cabin,
>>>>>> comes in from the direction of Godrevy. A tiny outboard seems to
>>>>>> pull aside; and the fat boat is only in the mirror, a speedboat
>>>>>> following it, but also only in the mirror. As water enters the
>>>>>> first of Smeaton’s arches, almost filled by sea-pushed sand,
>>>>>> many tourist boats come out, kayaks and pedalos and larger
>>>>>> craft, in an unheard buzz, the stinging insects of evening, a
>>>>>> lugger, out from the harbour and round the pier then north,
>>>>>> smoothly, rapidly, its hue the wide wings, with satiate
>>>>>> assurance, of a gull waddling dully on a house roof.
>>>>>>
>>>>>>
>>>>>>
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>>>>>> UNFRAMED GRAPHICS by Lawrence Upton
>>>>>> 42 pages; A5 paperback; colour cover
>>>>>> Writers Forum 978 1 84254 277 4
>>>>>> wfuk.org.uk/blog ----
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>>>>>>
>>>>>
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>>>> UNFRAMED GRAPHICS by Lawrence Upton
>>>> 42 pages; A5 paperback; colour cover
>>>> Writers Forum 978 1 84254 277 4
>>>> wfuk.org.uk/blog ----
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>>> and as you read the sea is turning its dark pages turning its dark
>>> pages.
>>>
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> Douglas Barbour
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> Latest books:
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> http://www.uap.ualberta.ca/UAP.asp?LID=41&bookID=664
> Wednesdays'
> http://abovegroundpress.blogspot.com/2008/03/new-from-aboveground-press_10
> .html
>
>
> and as you read the sea is turning its dark pages turning its dark pages.
>
> Denise Levertov
>
>
>
>
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Writers Forum 978 1 84254 277 4
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