Hey, Max, I truly love this part:
May as well roll out of bed
submit to some doggy toe-licking
and swop pyjamas for
day-clothes and boots.
At my feet two dogs sprawl
supervising my moves.
Can I reach my bootlaces still?
Can I still tie a firm knot?
*
My picture almost. Due to the weather here, I throw on shorts and thongs
(flip-flops to you people OS, not girly underwear), and my little ones
don't like toes until I get out of the shower - first thing they run
backwards and forwards to the front door, encouraging me to get a move on.
It's a relaxed poem. Max, at a relaxed pace. There is some excess baggage
there, but I feel that you are building up a collection of these domestic
and doggy poems and that the time to edit them will be when they are
collected together.
Andrew
On 23 November 2011 04:23, Sheila Murphy <[log in to unmask]> wrote:
> Max, not at all, just some momentary curiosity on my part! Stay tuned :)
>
> On Tue, Nov 22, 2011 at 1:14 PM, Max Richards <[log in to unmask]>
> wrote:
>
> > Sheila, you're welcome!
> >
> > follow your intuition and post - whether to the list or to me
> back-channel.
> >
> > I know I have a tendency to plod along a time line that's inherently
> > undramatic.
> >
> > Max
> >
> > Quoting Sheila Murphy <[log in to unmask]>:
> >
> > > Max, I am enjoying this piece very much. For some reason, I am tempted
> to
> > > wonder what would happen if the stanzas were placed in a different
> order.
> > > Would you be amenable to such considerations? This is not to say that
> > there
> > > is anything wrong with the order as it is. I just like to see what
> > happens
> > > sometimes. Sheila
> > >
> > > On Tue, Nov 22, 2011 at 12:18 PM, Max Richards <[log in to unmask]
> > >wrote:
> > >
> > > >
> > > >
> > > > First Thing
> > > >
> > > > Something's waking me -
> > > > far too early
> > > >
> > > > judging by my joint-aches
> > > > and the dark window.
> > > >
> > > > The dogs have begun to wrestle
> > > > voicelessly so far
> > > >
> > > > but their tumbling
> > > > makes highly audible thumping.
> > > >
> > > > Birds are at their tweeting -
> > > > they can't have anything
> > > >
> > > > new to tell each other -
> > > > earlier it was the park owl
> > > >
> > > > (Tawny Frogmouth, in truth)
> > > > with its 'who whom? who whom?'
> > > >
> > > > possible answers being
> > > > 'I catch small creatures.
> > > >
> > > > Don't you invade my beat.'
> > > > Was Tawny in my dream?
> > > >
> > > > Whatever I was dreaming
> > > > has already faded -
> > > >
> > > > why can't I have interesting
> > > > dreams like other people?
> > > >
> > > > May as well roll out of bed
> > > > submit to some doggy toe-licking
> > > >
> > > > and swop pyjamas for
> > > > day-clothes and boots.
> > > >
> > > > At my feet two dogs sprawl
> > > > supervising my moves.
> > > >
> > > > Can I reach my bootlaces still?
> > > > Can I still tie a firm knot?
> > > >
> > > > The motor hum on the road
> > > > is the newsagent's car
> > > >
> > > > as today's paper's tossed
> > > > from window over roof
> > > >
> > > > dumped with a dull thump
> > > > in the violets by my drive.
> > > >
> > > > Breakfast is in the offing.
> > > > Muesli with banana and a cuppa -
> > > >
> > > > much later I'll have coffee.
> > > > Testing the dogs' patience.
> > > >
> > > > Make a dash for their supplies.
> > > > Labs never learn good manners
> > > >
> > > > or not in this house.
> > > > Feed and be grateful.
> > > >
> > > > Such are the first things
> > > > peace and gratitude
> > > >
> > > > while the paper says
> > > > Syria Egypt Afghanistan.
> > > >
> > > > Who whom. Who whom.
> > > >
> > > >
> > > >
> > > >
> > > > Max Richards
> > > >
> > > >
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