Well, I tuned into it today - lost it completely yesterday (mind on other
matters) - yes, that 'that' could go, but a minor amendment ... I like 'some
tell or course' but here I'm thinking reader theory would have me reading my
own poem <g>
Andrew
On 12 May 2011 07:04, [log in to unmask] <[log in to unmask]> wrote:
> Thanks, doug.
>
> And might flick that that - I often have that debates.
>
> Cheers,
> Jill
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> On Thu May 12 1:50 , Douglas Barbour <[log in to unmask]> sent:
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> >It works both linguistically, Jill. (Do you need the 'that' in the 3rd
> line?)
> >
> >Doug
> >
> >
> >On 2011-05-11, at 7:43 AM, [log in to unmask] wrote:
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> >> Loss and Gain
> >
> >Douglas Barbour
> >[log in to unmask]
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> >http://www.ualberta.ca/~dbarbour/
> >http://eclecticruckus.wordpress.com/
> >
> >Latest books:
> >Continuations (with Sheila E Murphy)
> >http://www.uap.ualberta.ca/UAP.asp\?LID=41&bookID=664
> >Wednesdays'
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> http://abovegroundpress.blogspot.com/2008/03/new-from-aboveground-press_10.html
> >
> >Just a late night pilgrim
> >Looking for redemption in the underground.
> >Lord, won't you help a late night pilgrim
> >When the morning comes around.
> >
> > Tift Merritt
>
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Andrew
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'Mother Waits for Father Late' republished available at
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http://www.qlrs.com/poem.asp?id=766
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