It's a fine little tale, Max, but I feel that you might eventually edit it down a bit (hard to do dialogue in verse; maybe a bit too much description at the beginning?).
Doug
On 2011-05-10, at 10:06 PM, Max Richards wrote:
> Frutti di Mare
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