You are right.
I knew it was redundant and I do not know why I did not use my later
rewrite.
I have it now as "sclerotic lust"
Thank you
L
On Fri, Feb 11, 2011 at 4:06 PM, Douglas Barbour
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> I like the way 'This observer' is implicit before mentioned, & works a
> particular tone (which is somewhat undermined by the one line,
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> His voice growls in erotic lust.
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> I think it's the redundancy of 'erotic' there....
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> Doug
> On 2011-02-11, at 6:02 AM, Maud Starpey wrote:
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> > This observer
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