In a certain mood, this came instantly of your post:
Thank you for your comment, the snap, the verb.
It was a rework, a reform I did twice longer than a recent form,
a cut-up of my left leg entwined around my right, a fall down stairs,
a practice of a shorter gimp loosely done and tweaked, accounting
for my scattered bounce, a no-no in some places but fun in others.
-- Jim
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On Thu, Feb 17, 2011 at 5:21 AM, Jill Jones <[log in to unmask]> wrote:
> Hi Patrick,
>
> Thanks for that comment. It was a rework/reform I did today of a twice
> longer very recent poem. I'd been working on some ideas this week about
> cut-ups and feeding back one's own work - long story - so as practice I cut
> up the long poem into something shorter (still long, tho), based loosely on
> a system, then tweaked every so slightly. So that may account for the
> scattered bounce.
>
> By the way, I liked all the adverbs in your snap this week. They can be a
> no-no in some places and great fun in others.
>
> Cheers,
> Jill
>
>
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> On 17/02/2011, at 6:09 PM, Patrick McManus wrote:
>
> Jill I old oldie enjoyed the cheery scattered bounce of this
>> P
>>
>> -----Original Message-----
>> From: Poetryetc: poetry and poetics [mailto:[log in to unmask]] On
>> Behalf Of Jill Jones
>> Sent: 17 February 2011 07:02
>> To: [log in to unmask]
>> Subject: snap - reformed
>>
>> Gem/ weird, reforming
>>
>>
>>
>> A second is only a sample of how
>>
>> a roof becomes rain.
>>
>> I've been careless with corsets.
>>
>> When the sex machine's on the blink
>>
>> turn up yr radio, is it the sound
>>
>> of silver pumping?
>>
>> There's too much ash and
>>
>> not enough syntax
>>
>> to make me watch with my baby tonight.
>>
>> If prime ministers could shelve their selves we
>>
>> could all be walking to boot.
>>
>> A mosquito yaps into
>>
>> the shimmering yard, if the dark's
>>
>> dark that's perception for you, boom tish
>>
>> but wait, that's the milky way
>>
>> staggering up there.
>>
>> Ladies and gentlemen, here's to the aliens
>>
>> yes to all those yeses.
>>
>> The rose isn't as ancient as its seed
>>
>> but it opens, dung is juice
>>
>> and the zapper is broken.
>>
>> But you can't recall your species anymore
>>
>> they won't listen.
>>
>> Succumbing isn't an answer
>>
>> nor is it a question
>>
>> and you could be right
>>
>> or frustrated by imagination.
>>
>> Let's fall without sleeping this once.
>>
>>
>>
>>
>>
>> Sydney 17 Feb
>>
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>> Jill Jones
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>> website: www.jilljones.com.au
>> blog: rubystreet.blogspot.com
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