I like it too! it's the kind of thing I wish I could write, really.
*This cold shawl* sets off the rest with its perfect non-saying.
I'm not sure that you actually need the first stanza, though -- that seems
less original, somehow.
Janet (still listening) (saw Leonard Cohen perform last night!)
On 24 November 2010 00:01, sharon brogan <[log in to unmask]> wrote:
> I am wrapped in winter.
> I am not who I was.
> I am materially different
> from the yesterday me.
>
> I am a pattern of information.
> I am mostly space.
> I am mostly not human.
> I am a crowd of symbionts,
>
> parasites, and human cells.
> I am emergent.
> I am an illusion.
> *This cold shawl.*
>
> But still
> the garden fills
> with moonlight
> and snow.
>
--
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