I rebroke the first line awhile ago. In the meantime the poem stands. Ten poets, eleven opinions.
KW
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Ken Wolman http://awfulrowing.wordpress.com/
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On Oct 20, 2010, at 10:34 AM, Douglas Barbour wrote:
> Aside form also thinking that you forgot to break the fist line, Ken, I kinda agree with Andrew, & add that perhaps you can move into a more active voice:
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> At home the frozen vodka bottle
> sang to me in the voices of
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> sort of thing...?
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> Gets to the core of the situation, though; just you can get there faster, harder?
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> Doug
> On 19-Oct-10, at 4:56 PM, Ken Wolman wrote:
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