people who think they are going to hell, probably aren't
(not that I believe in it)
Yes, more! More, more! For one thing, I want to know what *she* is wearing.
I don't like the last line... usual reason: it puts an interpretation on the
situation for us instead of letting us figure it out
Janet
On 15 July 2010 19:10, Ken Wolman <[log in to unmask]> wrote:
> More, you ask. I am going to hell for t his for sure:-).
>
> First Meeting of My Parents, 1925
>
> Inelegant in felt hat and vested suit
> he looks her over in the furrier’s office
> hey nice ass
>
> she knows he is looking
> cocks her head smiles
> pre-Raphaelite pose
> pelts in place of water lilies
> and fallen leaves on a forest floor
>
> eventually there will be
> me
>
> Imagination fails I cannot do this
> picture your parents Doing It
>
> he will take her to lunch perhaps dinner
> it will go as it went
> does he tell her he is married
> it will explode
>
> what they do is still a crime
> in New York State
>
> they marry in 1934
> what is left by then but too much
> knowledge of the other
> misery burned into them at the vows
> --------------
> Ken Wolman http://awfulrowing.wordpress.com/
>
> "All writers are hunters, and parents are the most available prey."
> --Francine du Plessix Gray
>
> On Jul 15, 2010, at 5:03 AM, Max Richards wrote:
>
> > Ken,
> > This piece of writing is very involving for this reader.
> > I wonder if you will expand it.
> > It seems to belong with other personal writings you have shared with us.
> > Not going to the record office! This feels like a time bomb, a delayed
> > charge, that is bound to lead to some sort of a sequel.
> >
> > Best from Max in Melbourne
> > --
> >
> >
> >
>
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