O dear, rereading Fred's reply I realize that I was about to say I
really liked the play off 'OHawthorn,' 'OLife,' & then 'OGraeme,' but
theyre the result of something in his program.
I agree with his comments; & wonder even further if you can tighten up
the narrative a bit more elsewhere, Max. But I can see that, in this
case, the story is, well, the story....
Doug
On 2-Jun-10, at 2:52 PM, Frederick Pollack wrote:
> Very funny and well-observed, sardonic w/out hostility. Rhythm of
> end bothers me --- suggest: "Philanthropy // only goes so far in
> such cases as this."
>
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> The Sculpture Opening
Douglas Barbour
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