Doug,
I agree that the last sentence stands as the strongest such unit, but though I worked hard to simulate syntax in each accumulation of words ending with a period (usually
starting with a disjunctive gathering), I was also trying to write lines. When I set it in Pages, I formatted ten lines, but in the transmission to Poetryetc, lines 4 and 5
carried over. That interferes with my intended nine long lines concluding with a resonant short line, and I can understand how readers might take it as prose. In addition,
each of my three sources began as prose.
Barry
On Thu, 28 Jan 2010 09:16:46 -0700, Douglas Barbour <[log in to unmask]> wrote:
>Stopped especially by that penultimate sentence, Barry.
>
>Doug
>On 27-Jan-10, at 4:39 PM, Barry Alpert wrote:
>
>> MASH-UP MARJORIE/ANN PERLOFF/STODDARD
>>
>>
>> Communication--the question suspended--flow wired poetry. Not is what
>> information giving absence of factual. Not is information redaction.
>> Information of language--the low ends. The in-composed pine boards.
>> Is it although high ends our own? In goes anything sensitive but
>> unclassified.
>> Prickly quite were poets that learned “water, board”. Properly,
>> more tortured.
>> But endgame reframed censorship. Comes not from construction reader.
>> Conceptually enhanced interrogation techniques that surely invoke
>> Marcel Duchamp’s chain of custody. Thought up anomalies--
>> stained shirt splashing--opens up that making-meaning of
>> “silence, listening”.
>>
>>
>> Barry Alpert / Silver Spring MD US / 1-27-10 (6:37 PM)
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