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From: "kasper salonen" <[log in to unmask]>
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Sent: Friday, November 06, 2009 12:16 PM
Subject: Re: "Closure"
I wanted to mention how well this starts: "the annoying way", and then an
interrupting aside. certainly annoying! but I read on & enjoyed.
I also liked the internal monologue, or rather the outward description of
the dialogue. plus your list technique was great, and I especially liked the
line "money, his wife, or dinner." I laughed aloud at that juxtaposition.
quite reminiscent of Woody Allen, to me.
I've also just been recounting Stephen Dedalus' religious crisis, and the
lines "I got tired / of shoveling my best moods / through a hole in the sky"
are especially poignant to me right now, though never having possessed a
religious vein myself, per se.
funny how I'm receptive of this mode of poetry right now, when usually I
find it irksome. I just enjoyed the moment here. I've been receptive to
stream of consciousness recently as well, what with dipping my toes into
Joyce, even utilising it in my own writing.
anyway, thanks Frederick.
Kasper, I'm very glad you liked this - and especially the aspects you
liked - but predictably I have to ask: *which mode of poetry (that you
usually find irksome) am I doing here, exactly? An "I"-poem? Traditional