This is quite neat, Kasper. I think youre right to think there could
be another iteration, some judicious cutting (I'm not sure of the
penultimate stanza, & some of the 'is' phrases), but 'the winds are
collapsing shelves' is a terrific image.
Doug
On 6-May-09, at 4:06 PM, kasper salonen wrote:
> best read slowly, I find. first iteration.
>
> NOON'S LOOMS
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