or in either version, get rid of the 'the's...?
Doug
On 4-Mar-09, at 4:27 AM, andrew burke wrote:
> Maybe better as -
>
> dove on the greay roof's
> pinnacle
> before palm fronds
> waving in a white cloud
>
> ????
>
> 2009/3/4 andrew burke <[log in to unmask]>
>
>> dove on the pinnacle
>> of the grey roof
>> before palm fronds
>> waving in a white cloud
>>
>> turns as if
>> the breeze has pushed
>> her crest
>>
>> flies solo
>> to the setting sun
>>
>> --
>> Andrew
>> http://hispirits.blogspot.com/
>>
>>
>
>
> --
> Andrew
> http://hispirits.blogspot.com/
>
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