And isn't that the beauty of poetry? Something that might transport me is an
ill-sorted mess to someone else.
I'm sticking with it. Brevity and directness are two interests of mine in
poetry right now.
Caleb
On Mon, Feb 23, 2009 at 10:33 AM, Martin Walker <[log in to unmask]> wrote:
> I'm sorry to say that it does almost nothing for me. I dislike that fistful
> of consonants in "love with Sarah's", the repetition of "its" in two lines.
> It has been shown, I believe, that chimpanzees can use their tongues and
> mouths to vocalise; they are not tongue-tied but lack certain genes and see
> no point in learning to talk, I guess, and apes are not ugly to each other.
> Scholars do not fall in love with the object of their attention, though they
> may be obsessed with it. The useless repetition in this pair of quatrains
> suggests that the latter is the case rather than love here.
> cheers
> Martin
>
>
> Gimme eastern trimmin' where women are women
> In high silk hose and peekaboo clothes
> And French perfume that rocks the room
> And I'm all yours in buttons and bows.
> Livingston/Evans 1947
> ----- Original Message ----- From: "Caleb Cluff" <[log in to unmask]>
> To: <[log in to unmask]>
> Sent: Sunday, February 22, 2009 11:27 PM
> Subject: DM Thomas interview
>
>
> In Saturday's *Age
>> *newspaper<
>> http://www.theage.com.au/news/entertainment/books/hotel-of-broken-dreams/2009/02/20/1234633035833.html
>> >,
>> but moreso striking for this elegant piece, that does everything I
>> expect
>> and desire in a poem, in eight lines.
>>
>> I fell in love with Sarah's nape
>> Between her short black hair and collar
>> Ugly and tongue-tied as an ape
>> I fell in love with Sarah's nape
>>
>> Its coolness, whiteness, slender shape
>> She never knew I was its scholar
>> I fell in love with Sarah's nape
>> Between her short black hair and collar.
>>
>> He is online here <http://www.dmthomasonline.com/>
>>
>> Caleb
>>
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