Hi Candice
Many thanks for that. I see your point...in the first fitt
"high-gabled" is much better (so I have changed it). In fitt IV it
really doesn't work soundwise! One syllable too many and the sound too
heavy. I might leave that one as is, unless I can think of another way
of casting it.
A quick search shows they are the only occurrences.
Any other helpful tips from your eagle eye greatly appreciated...
xA
On Wed, Nov 26, 2008 at 11:24 AM, MC Ward <[log in to unmask]> wrote:
> Alison,
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> I like what you've done in fitts 3 and 4, but the appearance of <eaves> again (I think you used it in fitt1 as well) reminded me that I wanted to suggest using <gables> instead, as Heorot is a <horned> or <antlered> hall and you get more sweeping height with <gables>. (Just a suggestion.)
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> Candice
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