Judy, with all the hesitations one adopts and needs to make sure my
comments can be ignored, it seems that this is over revised or edited.
For me, this allows two possibles, first to go back and look again at
earlier versions or as seems to happen so often with my writing, to go
further again and as such get over the over revised draft???
Best, chris jones
On Sun, 2008-10-05 at 23:04 -0400, Judy Prince wrote:
> Here's a revised version---not Sufi, not especially 'mystical', but perhaps
> more easily understood. Comments welcomed.
> Judy
>
> SIDELINED
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>
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> blade in my jeweler's saw,
>
> you quaver and lock taut
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> I slice you, waxed,
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> through copper and silver sheets
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>
>
> but oh my love you confound me
>
> you slice through my breathing,
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> through the crickets' throb,
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> that one-note ache that slows my tools
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>
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> thunder, lazy raindrops
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> an autumnal storm pocks the river
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> and lightning follows your face
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>
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> you leave me now
>
> you go, like a fox to the grapes
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> tail flicking
>
>
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> jbprince
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