Reckon it's better - and the ending is tight and witty. The 'Us' is
explained nicely for unsubtle readers like me ... Not quite, PG, Ken! I like
- and know the feeling of wanting a replay of certain past dalliances. 'Oh
to lie down but to sleep in bed ...' from memory, (DT's)
2008/10/28 Kenneth Wolman <[log in to unmask]>
> Went from R to PG, hopefully not bland or dessicated.
> AND SHE WENT HOME WITH ME AT LAST
> an inept liar promising that nothing had to happen
> because she'd fought off the (so I said) inevitable Us,
> and for angry weeks and I'd grown tired of my sticky underwear
> and the pathetic relief of the office men's room
> from another arrested lunchtime roll in the local park.
> Betty I don't care a damn about your fiance
> I care a real lot about fucking you!
> and got her to shiver when I talked dirty to her,
> so when at last she went home with me
> of course what would happen was not
> up for doubt or waiting,
> "I can't get no satisfaction" on the box
> in the background, but like hell we couldn't,
> only the fabulous is what we got
> Jong ziplessness with names but no strings,
> and it was everything it should have been
> and I, idiot, have been chasing that moment ever since
> forty years ago when nobody owed the other,
> no obligation, no expectations, a dreamworld and
> you could still smoke in bed afterwards.
> Ken Wolman http://bestiaire.typepad.com
> "I have been watching you; you were there, unconcerned perhaps, but with a
> strange distraught air of someone forever expecting a great misfortune, in
> sunlight, in a beautiful garden."--Maurice Maeterlinck, Pelleas et Melisande