Judy, yes to revision. I should come back to this but first an earlier
quote you wrote...
"Here's a revised version---not Sufi, not especially 'mystical'"
I misread this as saying you have cut out the Sufi and the mysticism,
hence an immediate interest in earlier drafts, if you can follow this
at least partly? Being a dyed in the wool Marxist, which is to say,
Vitalist, anyone who mentions mysticism and even Sufi has my immediate
interest and possible approval. (Well, it is a convoluted argument, but
just live with it, as a vitalist would say.)
Patrick White, a novelist whose Baroque and twisted Gothic style could
be considered poetry, was proud of the fact that he made sure all his
previous revisions and manuscripts were burnt or destroyed (except for a
few survivors) to keep them safe from squirrel scholars. However,
writers such as myself would have most welcomed such scholars who are
able to preserve one writer's technical difficulties and solutions with
a great generosity of spirit.
You seem to write and revise in a different way to myself, but seeing
something different is most often ... well, wonderful.
Editing the many multiple several revisions of Allan Ginsberg's Howl
makes the editor and publisher appear as a true saint. (I use to work in
publishing and was on occasions an editor, BTW.)
best, Chris Jones.
On Fri, 2008-10-17 at 09:26 -0400, Judy Prince wrote:
> I agree with you, Christopher, about the silliness of the sin of Showing
> Revision. It's empowering to find that others have committed that sin, as
> well as the higher Sin of Revision!
> Shy poets, and beginning poem-writers, might find these exposed sins a huge
> leap for their own confidence and the answers to _why_ and when other poets
> make changes.
> Good on you, as 'we' say, for the several green thumbs! Twelve pots of
> Hemerocallis hyperion [fragrant yellow daylilies] sit dying in my front
> garden for my not planting them yet. And a flat of little sweet-faced
> purple/lavender violas. And it's about to rain. Planting veg? A whole
> nother game! But grapes, raspberries, and such, much easier. Had a fig
> tree do beautifully here in VA, but have read recently that they are
> ruthless water-seekers, even invading folks' basement water supplies! Ah,
> but fresh figs!!!!