I somewhat second Judy, but also wonder if you can rid the piece of
the 'is's & 'are's, get those lines out of the somewhat passive sense.
the colours shine...
On 30-Sep-08, at 4:49 AM, kasper salonen wrote:
> disregard that earlier version, it's got more of a form now. here:
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Continuations (with Sheila E Murphy)
bleary with hashish at a ghazal dud show
in Kurdistan, soaring Muslim melodies
over a smoked-out Jamaican one drop
Brian Francis Slattery