Ah, Dave. I really am glad for your feed-in, want others', too. I hope
you'll 'hover' a bit, neutrally, p'raps until you've written a few more
vilanelles and triolets that break free the form as well as hers do.
I think you'll find, as well, that her 'light' illuminates things rather
more deeply than you'll at first think. Am still searching around for
another of her creative villanelles, darn it. Can't seem to google it up,
tho, and all my files are somewhere else at the moment.
This Liz Bassett has steeped herself in all the forms, I'm convinced of it.
She can do them as strictly as you please . . . and she can stretch them as
far as her seeming 'lightness' pleases her.
joodles still looking for that villanelle.
2008/9/12 David Bircumshaw <[log in to unmask]>
> she likes 'light' doesn't she, Joodles? Hasn't anybody told her about
> the problem of full rhyme in English, even John Donne (the brainiest
> of us half-witted songbirds) couldn't evade its predictability.
>
>
> Best
>
> Dave
>
>
> 2008/9/12 Judy Prince <[log in to unmask]>:
> > Following's the third of Liz Bassett's poems shortlisted in the
> _Guardian's_
> > Poetry Workshop series in 2005. This was Carol Rumen's workshop on
> > triolets. Rumen's comment follows the poem:
> >
> > *Field Maple Triolet by Liz Bassett*
> >
> > Thinking of you, I see a tree,
> >
> > and open sky and birds and sun
> >
> > inside my head.
> >
> > My heart blows free
> >
> > thinking of you.
> >
> > I see a tree
> >
> > and you are there, a rolling sea
> >
> > of light-filled leaves; of love begun.
> >
> > Thinking of you, I see a tree,
> >
> > and open sky, and birds, and sun.
> >
> > --------------------------------------------------
> >
> > A gently exploded triolet, this one is full of space and lightness. The
> > 'stepped' lines work beautifully: they break the hold of the refrain and
> > make us stop, a little out of breath, and share the speaker's sense of
> > excitement and strangeness. This is a triolet that refreshes the form and
> > opens up its refrain-rich density. The title adds a specific, valuable
> > detail. Lovely!
> >
>
>
>
> --
> David Bircumshaw
> Website and A Chide's Alphabet
> http://homepage.ntlworld.com/david.bircumshaw/
> The Animal Subsides http://www.arrowheadpress.co.uk/books/animal.html
> Leicester Poetry Society: http://www.poetryleicester.co.uk
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