I like so much of this. Well, all of it. I wonder might you think a
little about a different strategy for line length other than thought
unit - thought unit - thought unit?
Sally Evans wrote:
> Here's a new snap. It's a real snap: ie writing now. I think all this
> fior stuff woke us up, but it's getting boring now.
> So. Do snaps have a title?
>
> Night so short
>
> Night so short in summer
> in a northern latitude
> we sleep with the curtain closed
> to keep the sun from waking us at four
> as it sails over the north east horizon and the hills
> heading straight for a rain cloud
> that has dampened the earth and gone
> before we start our routine day
> rubbing our eyes awake
> to be sure we have missed
> the creatures of darkness.
>
>
> Sally Evans
> http://www.poetryscotland.co.uk
> http://groups.msn.com/desktopsallye
>
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Tad Richards
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The moral is this: in American verse,
The better you are, the pay is worse.
--Corey Ford
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