Thanks, Doug, I want the text to have more cadence and music than a speech, so I'll be editing and fixing. It's not a prose poem, the lines are long but have breaks.
The magpie is a thief, and steals nests of other birds. I have appropriated some images from Brodsky's poem "New Life" for 4 pieces now, the first three are called "New Life 1-3" and will be in an issue of Drunken Boat soon. This one is about death, thus, not named "New Life 4", but still mining and changing images and tone of that poem.
Larissa
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From: Douglas Barbour <[log in to unmask]>
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Subject: Re: SNAP: Magpie Translation of Joseph Brodsky 4 (very much in progress)
Given what you say, Larissa, set as prose(poem)?
It sounds a speech; so works for me that way.
I like the concept of a 'magpie translation,' even though I'm not sure what you mean by it....
Doug
On 8-Jul-08, at 10:20 PM, Larissa Shmailo wrote:
>
> Rather a word than the horizon’s glance, you'll wait for it, > judging the
> sea.
> This last chance of living now deceases, deep creases your brow, so > long now
>
> you’ve looked to the end. Trapped by activity, you will die doing > tasks,
> going
> it, poor baby, alone. The sea, you realize, shall live, and that, > soon, not
> much.
> Quick, find a surgeon, eat a sturgeon, stave, stave, stave it off! > The
> stakes
> (after all!) the stakes are so high! But I assure you: you won’t be > there.
> You’ll
> feel, as you go, the ebbing, the loosening, the downward slip, is > all. Death
> is
> a word we have no definition for, you’ll fall, swallowed alive, > you’ll
> fall.
>
>
> Cheery-bye!
> Larissa
>
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