as in Finnegans. what do you mean, prowling elves? :o
KS
2008/5/31 David Bircumshaw <[log in to unmask]>:
> Kasper
>
> do you mean 'wakean' as in Finnegans or as in prowling elves?
>
> 2008/5/31 kasper salonen <[log in to unmask]>:
> > fantastic Janet. you've written a poem in wakean! I enjoyed hugely
> >
> > KS
> >
> > 2008/5/30 Janet Jackson <[log in to unmask]>:
> >
> >> I thought after commenting about Prynne might be a good time to work on
> >> this
> >> poem ;-) but I'm still not satisfied with lines 6 and 7 and particularly
> >> not
> >> with 'extension' and 'meatsweat' which are too orange. (Words with a lot
> of
> >> 'e' sounds in them always seem orange to me... anyone else experience
> this
> >> kind of synesthesia?)
> >>
> >> In this poem my expression is tightly constrained by the form the poem
> has
> >> taken. Finding the one perfect word can take days or years.
> >>
> >> *breath*
> >>
> >> brush with that nightskin this dayskin.
> >> tangential coatmerge. totem furs.
> >> chimpgirl. panther.
> >>
> >> chill chubby sunmemory, thinlimbed mist.
> >> dimlysensed. vibrational. suspended.
> >> extension. locus.
> >>
> >> taint inspiration, meatsweat droplets.
> >> turning. pacing. turning. pacing. focus.
> >> flash flood of star-mangled breath
> >>
> >> just outside the scent markers of the gang boss
> >> just outside the territory of the tribe
> >> as they sleep. snoring. gone. I alert
> >>
> >> both eyes scanning
> >> skin stretched wide
> >>
> >>
> >> --
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> >
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>
>
> --
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