fantastic Janet. you've written a poem in wakean! I enjoyed hugely
KS
2008/5/30 Janet Jackson <[log in to unmask]>:
> I thought after commenting about Prynne might be a good time to work on
> this
> poem ;-) but I'm still not satisfied with lines 6 and 7 and particularly
> not
> with 'extension' and 'meatsweat' which are too orange. (Words with a lot of
> 'e' sounds in them always seem orange to me... anyone else experience this
> kind of synesthesia?)
>
> In this poem my expression is tightly constrained by the form the poem has
> taken. Finding the one perfect word can take days or years.
>
> *breath*
>
> brush with that nightskin this dayskin.
> tangential coatmerge. totem furs.
> chimpgirl. panther.
>
> chill chubby sunmemory, thinlimbed mist.
> dimlysensed. vibrational. suspended.
> extension. locus.
>
> taint inspiration, meatsweat droplets.
> turning. pacing. turning. pacing. focus.
> flash flood of star-mangled breath
>
> just outside the scent markers of the gang boss
> just outside the territory of the tribe
> as they sleep. snoring. gone. I alert
>
> both eyes scanning
> skin stretched wide
>
>
> --
> Janet Jackson <[log in to unmask]>
> www.proximity.webhop.net (Poetry)
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>
> The Line Mine, bulletin board for Perth poetry & spoken word:
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