If you deleted 'from childhood' the flush does more work. (Then, maybe
end that line with 'as' // each stroke of oil on canvas ...'
Just a thought.
Andrew
On 09/04/2008, Heather Taylor <[log in to unmask]> wrote:
> Portrait of a Woman
> Lucas Cranach (the Younger) 1566
>
> It took 20 years to make you permanent memory
> Like his first wife hung above the mantle
> Her cheeks still flushed from childhood
>
> As each stroke of oil on canvas brought out wrinkles,
> The shadows on your face, furred collar, pious shirt,
> Only your smile betrays you're finally his.
>
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Andrew
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