I like the meditative quality of this snap, Sharon, but wonder if it
would catch the awe & hope more if you changed the last few stanzas as
so:
> let me be a stillness in the snow
>
> let me be
> this darkness in the white world
> let me sit still
>
> sparrows in the snow
> sun comes, snow goes
> let me sit
It felt to me that the poem was leading to such a 'prayer'....
Hmmnn?
Doug
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