More or less, Janet, but it's up to you (of course).
Doug
On 28-Mar-08, at 5:58 AM, Janet Jackson wrote:
> thanks P & D
> I take it, Doug, you just generally think the first two stanzas are
> too
> verbose?
> There are some words that are there mainly for the sake of rhythm, I
> guess... and possibly I was trying to contrast the messy complexity of
> 'reality' with the clean simplicity of dream. Now that I think about
> it!
> Janet
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