You're probably right, Andrew, although I'd already cut a few others....
Seen so to speak while driving around the city....
Doug
On 12-Mar-08, at 6:42 PM, andrew burke wrote:
> Doug - try it without the thes (in both) ... 'lower reaches brown /
> across
> valley slopes' and 'lines of light / (lines of flight)' ... Just a
> thought -
> more your style, methinks.
>
> Andrew
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