Max,
I wondered how this text would end, and I was initially surprised by your management of the
close. In retrospect, the last 1.3 lines work well for me: ". . . it seemed / there were still words to
be set down."
Barry
On Wed, 12 Mar 2008 17:31:32 +1100, Max Richards <[log in to unmask]> wrote:
> Halting Place
>
>So it came to this, flopped
>on a park bench, near big trees,
>
>the two dogs at his feet, his eyes
>resting on the trickle of the creek,
>
>the sign saying Old Bullock Team Ford.
>No need to move again, everything
>
>slowing to a halt; the trees knew this best.
>But the dogs, stirring, were reminders
>
>of a future without him; they must be
>led home, reaching which, it seemed
>
>there were still words to be set down.
>
>
>Wednesday 12 March 2008
>
>Max Richards
>
>Doncaster, Victoria
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