I don't have any problems with 'critical missive' but since Max points it
out maybe some other kind of imposing order could do. I also noticed 'an
other' and settled it as a poetic licence.
Altogether a quite good poem, unlike Janet I love the woven shawl of light
from the ceiling, it has a metaphysical protective quality in it.
On Jan 8, 2008 5:36 AM, Max Richards <[log in to unmask]> wrote:
> Lovely, Sharon, except for 'critical missive', somehow, and 'an other', to
> my ear.
> Max
>
>
> On 8/1/08 2:21 PM, "sharon brogan" <[log in to unmask]> wrote:
>
> > Let Us Examine the Symbolism of Dreams
> >
> > The falling dream. The flying dream.
> > The dream in which you lose your teeth.
> >
> > The abandoned kittens, the lost dogs,
> > the infant floating in its cradle on the lake.
> >
> > The woman weeping, alone, in the forest.
> > The beast with an urgent message,
> >
> > a critical missive you don't understand.
> > You fall, and someone offers his hand.
> >
> > You reach out, but your fingers slip
> > through one another like light, like water.
> >
> > You walk through the rooms of your life.
> > They are laid out, one by one, like a rail-
> >
> > road flat with no corridors, no hallways.
> > You watch your own life pass as though
> >
> > in a mirror, somehow reversed, somehow
> > not quite as it was. Is there an other hand?
> >
> > You wake in the fog of morning, slanted
> > bars of light on the ceiling. These images
> >
> > wrap the shoulders of your waking hours.
> > You wear it through your long days. This
> >
> > intricately woven shawl. This treasured
> > gift from someone who once loved you.
> >
> >
> >
>
> --
>
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Anny Ballardini
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I Tell You: One must still have chaos in one to give birth to a dancing
star!
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