I enjoyed this, its swift turns, Bob, but admit t being bothered by the
"'twas" & the"p'rhaps", maybe because I assume they would be said that
way, but perhaps only by 'you.' Against the 'jazzy' feel, they send a
not of archaism that seems out of place....
Doug
On 24-Oct-07, at 3:35 PM, Bob Marcacci wrote:
> 'twas all it was
> that jazzy jot on
> the spot p'rhaps all
> prop & pap
> not just some
> sun snap
> someone who happens
> a lot...
> we put it on
> dot after dot
> in the dizzy dapple of what may
> pop
> *
> purrs
> as it whirs it turns
> snaps
> whoop!
>
> --
> Bob Marcacci
>
> The superfluous is very necessary.
> - Voltaire
>
>
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