Okay, Candice, yes, it takes on the ghazal & mocks it almost, but more
than that, it s(w)ings. Though I do like the concept of couplets
dis-connected (even though many of my 'breath ghazals' didn't quite
manage that). But this undone one is a delight.
Doug
On 16-Oct-07, at 4:18 PM, MC Ward wrote:
> I'm interested in work like Hal's that reinvents a
> form by blowing it out of the water--BUT I'm getting
> real sick of sonnets, old and new. Maybe we could move
> on to other formal forms and blow THEM out of the
> water, for a change. My own attempt, successful or
> not, as you (my audience) deem it--a ghazal (is it?)
> that breaks the rules of ghazal form (the so-called
> American ghazal, that is, popularized--sorta--by
> Adrienne Rich).
>
> It's dedicated--avant la lettre--to Joe D., by the
> way, as he has also played with gazelle/ghazal in his
> poem "The Gazelles," which I swear I never read until
> after I'd written mine. (Do you believe me, Kasper?)
>
> Run-on Ghazal, Undone
>
> Naturally, you imagine her eyes of some maternal
> color
> brighter ahead than gazania as she leaps and takes you
>
> aback without a glance to keep you in stride; home on
> the run's your belvedere, her unexamined assumption
>
> in the face of tigers always behind, their oral
> tradition
> chatoyant in a running order where stripes taste
> blotched;
>
> _non gazebo, non videbo_, sums up this tiffin relation
> of
> savanna ecology: blindness and desire cinquefoiled as
> tiger's-
>
> eye theorizes hunger, the mother of all sandwiches in
> which you--
>
> Candice
>
> P.S. Sorry about the messy runovers--the poem's in
> couplets apart from the single last line.
>
>
>
>
>
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