I did enjoy this latest poem of Fred's, with its semi-detached tone
and lucid detail. The characters, especially Denny, are very
easy to picture. The final section reminds me of a short
story I read a while back in which people had given up bodies
and become software, living a totally virtual existence.
But...
I wonder why it needs to be in verse, or lineated, or
whatever we want to call it. Why not write it in prose?
Janet
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Janet Jackson <[log in to unmask]>
Poems at Proximity: www dot proximity dot webhop dot net
My life is like a movie
that everyone but me has seen
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