Ah, thanks for your comments, Janet. Here there are over a hundred
bulls - in fact, they're aiming at 200 for the first load! Last year,
they made a bit of a blunder and sent cows and calves off as well.
Whoops. So now they are righting the balance, as I see it. They are
talking 400 all up, at about $600A a head.
Yeah, the whole thing is going in the 'notes' file, not the poems file
>g< But that is the beauty of snaps: didn't have to be a complete
polished poem, but it got me off my lazy haunches and now I'm writing
a descriptive poem which may come to something.
Andrew
On 27/07/07, Janet Jackson <[log in to unmask]> wrote:
> I liked it better before - which wasn't that much to be honest.
> It is less selfconscious now and "Ngallagunda boy" is an improvement,
> but the tone has become halting and unnatural.
> There are too many line breaks.
>
> Also, a hundred bulls sounds an awful lot!
> Usually you have only a few bulls and hundreds of cows.
>
> Spelling correction: wield, not weild.
>
> Janet
>
> > on a stockyard fence
> > a black crow steps
> > gingerly toward
> > a chirping chittering
> > willy-wagtail
> > whose lifelong mate
> > skips and hops
> > in the waterfall
> > of a sprinkler set
> > to settle the dust.
> >
> > a five year old
> > Ngallagunda boy
> > weilds a whip
> > shortened for him -
> > still he makes it crack
> > lightning and thunder
> > among the dust of
> > a hundred bulls.
> >
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