> This is the trick, my love - a sleight
> of mouth to slay the sentence
> gone wrong, speech despite
if you put "word" instead of "sentence"?
This is the trick, my love - a sleight
of mouth to slay the word
gone wrong, despite
and eliminate "speech" as well ?
On 6/27/07, Douglas Barbour <[log in to unmask]> wrote:
>
> Well done, Caleb; it fooled me the first stanza or so, the run-ons
> across stanza breaks doing a good job of that.
>
> Yet the tone comes into its own as villanelle...
>
> Doug
> On 26-Jun-07, at 5:39 PM, Caleb Cluff wrote:
>
> > This is the trick, my love - a sleight
> > of mouth to slay the sentence
> > gone wrong, speech despite
> >
> > mewing, gurgling in the night,
> > vowel-torn on an angry fence.
> > This is the trick, my love - to write
> >
> > of distance, loss of sight
> > and fractured, fissile sense
> > gone wrong; to speak despite
> >
> > knowing less and less. Alight
> > upon your weakest bone and hence,
> > this is the trick. My love, the light
> >
> > shines through us, makes us slight.
> > Throwing our voices, we are translucence
> > gone wrong, still speak despite
> >
> > that empty mouth. Its bite
> > will swallow our diffidence.
> > This is the trick, my love. The sleight
> > gone wrong, the speech despite.
> >
> > Caleb Cluff
> > Majorca, Vic.
> > 27/6
> >
> >
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