I can't say it's 'about' anything so much Pat, tho' Celan swirling in
the Seine is there yes; and yes, there is mercury in light tubes. How
they met is beyond me.
c
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From: Poetryetc: poetry and poetics [mailto:[log in to unmask]] On
Behalf Of Patrick Mc Manus
Sent: Thursday, 3 May 2007 6:13 PM
To: [log in to unmask]
Subject: Re: Early Snap - Psychopomp
This is about suicide isn't it?
Does one have mercury in a flourescent tube?
Cheers thanks
Patrick de raynesparkus
-----Original Message-----
From: Poetryetc: poetry and poetics [mailto:[log in to unmask]] On
Behalf Of kasper salonen
Sent: 01 May 2007 18:46
To: [log in to unmask]
Subject: Re: Early Snap - Psychopomp
rather obscure to me meaning-wise Caleb, but otherwise this doesn't
disappoint in the least.
the opening dreamsequence thing is wonderfully lightly symbolic, like
the
shadow of a fairytale.
I like the use of 'fluorescent' as a noun, instead of something regular
like
'bulb'. it gives the scene lighting.
the personification of Mercury sounds slightly familiar, but it's good
because it isn't taken too far; it's just a slapped instant.
KS
On 01/05/07, Caleb Cluff <[log in to unmask]> wrote:
>
> I dreamt of girls with hair like windlasses
> lowering me into wellshafts, retrieving cold buckets of darkness.
>
> you won't see 50 they say
> but i saw it baby. i saw it
>
> like a broken fluorescent
> outside a public toilet
>
> bespattered on the ground it hurt
> and Mercury himself, out of his dust
>
> had got away, had aimed his car
> and was gone, laughing. He was travelling far.
>
> Caleb Cluff
> Majorca 1/5/07
>
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