Hey, Mark, I've got an idea (no applause, please). How about starting
with lines from Kern (Jerome, I'm thinking) and then leap into the
poem at (single line): A shame / thought, to close the windows / and
lose the sweet breeze.' Next verse I';d change the order a tad: ' For
the moment / I have joined / the complex aerodynamics / of leaves'
I like it the way it is, mind you, but the jokey tone of the beginning
just seems expendable to me (a closet minimalist).
Androo
On 17/05/07, Mark Weiss <[log in to unmask]> wrote:
> This here aint no
> pitter patter storm
> Mr. Kern, upon us suddenly
> from the south,
> the sky become
> a large green threat. A shame,
> though, to close the windows,
> and lose the sweet breeze.
>
> I have joined
> for the moment
> the complex aerodynamics
> of leaves.
>
--
Andrew
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